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Re: [DL] story

To: deadlands@gamerz.net
Subject: Re: [DL] story
From: Allan Seyberth <darious@darious.com>
Date: Wed, 01 May 2002 21:59:26 -0600
In-reply-to: <10e.109b862e.2a020be5@aol.com>
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Sender: owner-deadlands@gamerz.net

At 11:26 PM 5/1/2002 -0400, you wrote:
 >Our First Attempt at Deadlands

I appreciate the story dude, and would be interested in seeing the second.

But I do have one suggestion.

Break it down into paragraphs.  They really do help the readability of the 
finished product.

-------------------
Allan Seyberth
darious@darious.com

"A quart of milk please."
"Certainly!  Here you go. . . $147.95"
"$147.95?  For MILK?"
"Uhhh. . . it now comes bundled with 'Microsoft Explorer'.
                 - Dork Tower

References:
- [DL] story
  - From: Wolfgod820@aol.com

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