Re: [DL] Dead Presidents Comments <SPOILERS>

["Mr. Christopher McGlothlin, M.Ed." <cmcgloth@halifax.com>]

At 02:11 PM 7/25/2001, Roy Spence wrote:
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>Just managed to pick up Dead Presidents at the weekend and thought I'd post
>some thoughts, so it's spoilers all round.  Also a warning, this gets pretty
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>My major disappointment with the book was that the adventure seemed to skip
>over the investigation opportunities for the plot and instead concentrated
>on the opportunities for combat.

         Thank you very much, Mr. Spence, for taking the time to post some 
feedback on DP. Rest assured, it is most appreciated by the First Draft's 
author.;-)

         For what it's worth, in my own personal opinion (albeit one often 
clouded by a healthy Writer's Ego;-) ) your criticism is a valid one. 
Originally, Chapter One was a lengthy investigation into the whereabouts of 
the voodoo ritual's sacrificial victims, but in the playtest session Shane 
ran, it pulled the Posse off on a needless tangent. Therefore, Shane 
re-wrote it into a much more linear affair, and with that aim in mind, I 
think it's a good reworking of the material I submitted. (If I may be 
frank, Chapter One to me is all about Dr. Nick and the gory Slaughterhouse 
battle, and all else was commentary.;-) I was happy as long as those 
elements were retained after the revisions.)
         Also in the original draft, there was an investigation sequence 
right after the Posse breaks out of Castle Thunder Prison. I'm not sure how 
they would've gelled as a whole, but there were some potential individual 
encounters in there I thought were entertaining. There was also a search 
for the means to prevent Richmond's destruction, later in the final 
chapter. So far as I know, these segments were cut to make room for the D20 
stats, but it is (at least) equally possible they just sucked (and Shane 
saved me from embarrassing myself in print).


Deo Vindice,
Mr. Christopher L. McGlothlin, M.Ed.

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